This is fab, and you’re an excellent writer. Very intellectual – and this is an intellectual piece with intellectual characters. I get the swinger/cuck vibe from the narrator (Lola’s husband).

Like Isla, I went back to read again – mainly to clarify the narrator verses Lola, because that wasn’t very clear on my first reading. To make that more crystal, you might insert an early paragraph where the narrator talks about his new wife more distinctly and establishes her as a separate character from himself. That just seemed foggy to me during my first pass.

Hi Isla,

Just to clarify, it’s written by my man, HH, about me. It’s read by my friend Jupiter Grant, who has narrated all five of our books on Audible.com. She is amazing, but she has fallen ill lately.

Thank you, though,

Lola

Well, I will echo Isla’s sentiment. It’s simply lovely, and I love the allusions to Greek Mythology along with the Shakespearian vernacular.

this is a beautiful poem

Oh, this is so sweet. Well, let me get a Kleenex, then…and put up this razor. That is, unless you need some help shaving?

Pretty Cool! Makes me want to put the top down

Nice shower