I don’t know, I am trying to piece it together.

You have an excellent sense of meter, Adagio. I don’t run into that frequently. It’s accentuated, actually, by the lack of rhyme- which can occasionally be detrimental to a piece. Instead, you rely on consonance and alliteration.

This is sultry and stimulating

xoxo

Thank you. I don’t rely too much on rhyme because I am not gifted. I scribble.

Thank you kindly.

Martinis are ‘licious

“the thorn of the quill masturbating my soul” — amazing imagery and so original. I can feel that, and the stiletto cock.
Haunting poetry…

xoxoxo

You’re welcome. It’s good to see you over here, Adagio.

I think my welcome is worn out on the other site.

Why do you think your welcome is worn out?

Love the Dracula quote… and the jalapeno green eyes.
I like the presentation of this piece, the format and concentrated description.

xoxoxo

I try to be a little different in how I approach my writing.

Whew… that’s a brain spin, baby
The painting is cool

You’re welcome.

Ah, you brought this one over for sure… I remember it. What if De Vinci painted the Mona like this one?
You’ve got to watch out for those cloven tongue angels.

Writing is a challenge to me.

Wow, so I get to make the first comment.
You’re an excellent writer, and this is extremely romantic. I love how you intertwine the opulent atmosphere with food and sex. You have upscale experience in all departments. The imagery is fab. The food is exquisite. The drinks are maybe a little over the top for your average person with an average liver (many of us average folk would be on the floor)… but it works for the story. This is Cinderella level fantasy with an erotic twist. I read your first story, so I kind of know the backdrop on the relationship.

The music you mention is slightly dated, which is a casual observation on my part. I know these songs, but mainly from the office soft rock settings. I will say that I love literature that mentions music as a way of emphasizing mood and era. I think it works well in your piece. Your vocabulary is extensive and descriptive. This is a pleasurable read.

xoxo